Thursday, June 22, 2023

Dust Comments

Rating: 5.0

We are poor creatures
slimy organs imprisoned in flesh.
The sun burns us, water drowns us
our lives are rough and short,
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anais vionet
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Bri Edwards 30 June 2023

This 'poet', me, does NOT 'stammer', & I'd never be called QUIET. Ask anyone. : )

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Bri Edwards 30 June 2023

stanza 1: What do YOU consider 'short'? I'd say that the length of MINE right now is just about right! And I'd just as soon not have it become longer. Speaking of long hair, how much glue does it take to keep that rug on your head? bri ;)

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I had posted some notes here. Where have they vanished, PoemHunter?

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anais vionet 28 June 2023

I haven't seen any comments all month - I get notifications that they're here - but they aren't.

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Denis Mair 23 June 2023

Two weight-bearing pendulums improvise a way forward. Muscles flex while bones maintain rigidity, and so we stand erect...

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anais vionet 28 June 2023

Ok

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Denis Mair 23 June 2023

Two kinds of indomitability: 1) singing and dancing; 2) reducing things to dust (by will to know, or by hard-headed logic or maybe a death wish) .

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anais vionet 28 June 2023

I don't have a 'death wish.' I want to be a DR - so, it's a healing wish. But everyBODY dies, alas.

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6) Man has won and shall continue to win his/her fight against diseases and pandemics. But, in his overzealousness or overconfidence, he tends to vitiate the equilibrium of nature. Naturally, he will perish…

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anais vionet 28 June 2023

We certainly are creating problems for ourselves - that's true

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5) the Pandora's box may open again and let out New germs, viruses or bacteria hitherto unknown. But can it fail us? No! We win..

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anais vionet 28 June 2023

Time will tell. AI may be the answer.

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4) the second stanza is all about our weak body. Third stanza speaks about "imperfect" humanity, in both body and soul. But an indomitable spirit, the soul, takes it forward. Science (as we know today) may fail us.

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anais vionet 28 June 2023

OMG, I see your comments.. thank you. I'm reading them now.

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3) The Gita verses "Nainam chhindandi shastrani…." about the invincibility of soul and "Vaasamsi Jeernani Yadha Vihaaya.." about the perishable body.. It is only the body that perishes and turn as dust…..

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2) In the last two lines of the first stanza, she turns philosophical. But, obviously she has not heard of Bhagawat Gita. Gita speaks of body and soul as separate entities. Body perishes, but soul does not

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anais vionet 28 June 2023

I'd certainly like to think that's true - I HOPE it's true - the world would be different if everyone believed.

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As a student of Medicine, Ms Vionet tends to discuss human anatomy. Fortunately, she stops after just two or three lines of the first stanza…

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anais vionet 28 June 2023

Well, each poem must have a point, like an essay, this one was hope, I hope

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M. Asim Nehal 23 June 2023

We are made of dust and will become dust but our actions during our lifetime will shape the person we are remembered as.5*

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anais vionet 28 June 2023

Yes, absolutely true

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Nabakishore Dash 23 June 2023

Beautifully crafted piece dear poetess.

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