Monday, November 9, 2009

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Remember me? I am the one who loved you to death, I thought
I destroyed us last year, a battle lost and never fought
How do I stay alive now, without you day after day after day
Breathing and living, my heart beats without you in a lonely way
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Deborah Cromer
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Nikunj Sharma 10 November 2009

Yet again, simplicity delivering depth of the meaning.....you seem to be an expert in writing love poems that reflect on past , make you think and wonder.... I really liked the phrases 1. Heart beats in a lonely way........though all the hearts beat lonely, but this one conveys a tinge of sadness and melancholy........ 2. Dusty thoughts of a very dead ghost - again a powerful phrase, reflecting on a old forgotten love /past.... 3. Death and sadness of our yesterdays: pain again magnified by this phrase, death of yesterday meaning a closed chapter, a forgotten life, love, feelings etc.... Hats off to you for crafting and sharing this poem

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Deborah Cromer

Deborah Cromer

Portland, Oregon
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