Drifting- - -(Interlocking Chain Verse) Comments
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I'm drifting
drifting with the clouds so gently
gently uplifting and oversteering so purposely
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In the path of life you are drifting, I am drifting and all are drifting. Readers of the poem are too driftng. An outstanding poem amazingly shared.10 .
Sometimes we need to drift, don't we? It's really fun when you do it in a car around a corner! Thank you my friend for commenting and giving me a 10 on my drift-ability!
You make us all drift with your beautiful write. This poem is free-fall. (10)
I've got an ear-to-ear grin on my face! ! ! ! Free-Fall! ! ! ! ! ! That is a gorgeous thing to write and I thank you! So good to have you back among us! ! ! Thank you for the 10 as well! ! ! !
I rather enjoyed this style of writing. Writing about drifting with the clouds is a very pleasant perception. Perception of gentle movement with repeating words and alliteration (a repeating of sounds) , moves us ever so slightly towards your ending. Ending that really never stops the flow of this poem, this writing. Writing in this style is in itself a sort of drifting. Drifting is rather enjoyable.
It actually was a very relaxing style of poem to write [chain] and the topic sent me drifting happily along as I wrote it! I totally recommend the chain style verse as a pleasant change of pace style! Thank you Jette for your kind words!
What a lovely sentiment! Reminds me of the old song by the Sons of the Pioneers - Drifting along with the Tumbling Tumbleweeds. I can feel myself floating along in the air, sliding from one cloud to another, but never in fear of falling. Wonderful!
Oh, that was a wonderful thing to say. I remember that song and it did have a lovely sense of drifting along! ! ! Thank you and I'm glad my piece raised you up to go drifting amongst the clouds!
I liked this little verse, Susan. I agree with Simone Inez Harriman's comment above.
Thank you, Todd, for reading this and commenting on it. It was fun to write and I liked the way an interlocking chain verse flows.
Superb! What artistry! I get the image of a feather floating....but floating in tandem with the gentle demands of gravity (gravity of every type!) . Indeed, these words come together as a feather, not a pendulum!
Oh, I agree! ! ! No heavy pendulum of doom and gloom in this poem! ! ! Just sheer enjoyment of the moment in time we find ourselves in, going with the flow, shifting with the changes of direction, bending with the breeze, loving where we are going and loving where we've been! ! ! Thank you Mj for your read and for your uplifting comment! !
What a lovely chain verse. When reading this it felt like a little feather or a balloon drifting here and there gently touching, bumping and nudging the corners of life. Loved the sense of lightness of being in your poem. Beautiful.
Yes! ! ! ! That es exactly the effect I wanted this poem to have on people! ! ! You are as sensitive a reader as you are a writer.! ! ! ! Thank you for reading me and commenting, Simone- -your comments always inform and encourage!
You're spot on, Susan! Purposely was the right word to use in the context, and purposefully has a different meaning. Sorry! I'm imagining you drifting in a good-handling car...!
Yes, a new style for you, Susan. It's very effective for the topic. It's nice to experiment. By the way, did you mean purposely? Am I just ignorant or did you coin the word yourself? I know of purposefully or purposelessly... Anyway, I think your poem expresses your need to drift, perhaps away from the anxiety and stress of this tragic world. Who doesn't need that sometimes?
Ha! You made me look it up! ! ! ! [ I am quite capable of making up words :) ]Here's what Google says: pur·pose·ly ˈadverb on purpose; intentionally. she had purposely made it difficult synonyms: deliberately, intentionally, on purpose, by design, willfully, knowingly, consciously, of one's own volition; Whew! Glad it was there! But to be honest if it hadn't been a word, I still would have made it one....Purposefully would have dragged that poem's feet and ruined that sweet gliding drift going on that I was hearing and feeling! Thank you for a very alert comment! ! Shows you pay attention to what you're reading! That makes you an excellent reader and commentator! ! ! Yeah, I received a parole from the fear and anxiety and stress and I went on a drift, me and a good-handling car :)
beautiful, amazing, its flow, after reading this magnetic poem just one word I have for a pure comment, and that is drifting. lovely poem friend
I''m glad you felt the slow gliding movement that is drifting! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! It really is encouraging because I was hoping people felt that drifting feeling inside them by reading this. Thank you, you're a lovely poem of a friend! ! !
Wow! ! ! ! ! Yes! ! ! Definitely Hypnotic! ! ! ! ! Much Feeling Shown! ! ! ! ! Been A Road Known.. Excellently Done! ! ! ! ! Just Don't Slide Too Far! ! ! ! And For Goodness Sake Girl, Hold On Tight! ! ! ! ! heh.. Ever So Many 10S! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! Awesome! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! :) hanging in there too...no change of better..Many Prayers To You! ! ! ! ! And Your Family! ! ! ! ! saved
Hang in there, my friend- -prayers are surrounding you and yours. Thank you so much for your prayers.... they are a blessing. Yes! ! Feels good to have a wonderful drifting day, just going with the flow of the road.... Thank you for your encouragement and enthusiasm- they make a wonderful difference in this world. Blessings surround you, Becca! ! !
Hypnotic rhythm. and I like the chain verse idea very much. You are never afraid to experiment and this one succeeds because of the fine control of the rhythm. Well done, Susie.
Tom! What a lovely comment! ! ! Thank you- brought my spirits up! ! ! I do like to experiment but sometimes the poem looks a bit woe-be-gone by the time I get finished with the poor thing... but this one was a joy. Think I might try another one soon.
Beautiful poem gently drifting amongst clouds and corners of life, which make us feel good and light. That tells our life so calm even amongst storms. Loved it from your pen Susan.
I am so pleased that you enjoyed it. Geetha! ! It has such a sense of peace about it- - we all need a bit of drifting in our days to relax from the tension and stress of our lives.... may your heart and soul travel through the days with peace at the wheel! ! !
What a great feeling, your poem brings Like sailing in the arms of open Spring, Letting go, just drifting, peace to know Thanks for this very pleasant moment of 'détente' Your poetic talent is always such a welcomed chant.
Sandra, thank you for reading and commenting in your lovely poetic way. It is always a pleasure to read your comments that I feel we should give them a 10++++++++++++++++++ for their artistry and joy! ! ! !
Sliding softly sideways you are drifting now. With clouds you are very softly drifting. This poem is beautifully presented and this carries tenderness of expression. Feeling life is nice. Reaching up to every corner values more. An interesting poem is shared here....10
I am supremely pleased that you liked this piece. It came so softly and easily! ! ! ! Thank you also for the 10! ! ! !
Women drivers! Nice to see you sliding into poemhunter again, with a great poem in your hand! ! This style is different than I have seen you write, good to see you back! ! !
Ah-ha! ! ! I see you understand the sport of drifting! ! ! Trying a new type of poem takes me out of any style rut I may be settling into. Thank you for the kind comment, my friend!
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7/19/2025 2:15:45 AM # 1.0.0
This is an interesting poetic form! Reading this I feel like trying this out! But to deviate from the familiar pattern is always a challenge for me. With repeating words you could create the feel of a slow drifting i
Oh, I hope you give it a try- I think you could create poem after beautiful and sensitive poems with this form, I really do, Valsa