Dreamin' Comments

I'm 'stretching a bit', but I'll give 4 stars. Well, you WERE young when you wrote it! Ha ha. bri p.s. I looked up 'glory' and I doubt it is correct here.

'And build happy moments in my heart.' THAT's a very nice (and I guess 'poetic') line. : ) last stanza: I'd use 'plays' again here.

line 8: 'Draw the sparkle'? Would someone, in this case, be a friend/lover, or an artist, or an eye doctor, OR...an all-three-in-one person? ?

line 3: 'sighting'? Perhaps you meant 'sighing' or might want to use 'gazing'? ? line 4: you COULD do without 'to come'. line 5: I'd use 'into'.

your poem: line 2: 'lying' You MIGHT be surprised by how many people I've heard/'read' would use (incorrectly) 'laying'.

Would this poem from me possibly be helpful to either of your daughters? ...' What Is A Great Guy? ', She Asked Her Mom.... [loneliness; Choosing A Mate; Medium; Bri's Advice Column; Serious, Seriously! ]

Yes! I KNOW I sent last comment with a misspelling! ! Sometimes it is too tedious, for me, to try to correct something on PH. (cont.)

I've determined from your Poet's notes that you are about my daughter's age, and, from your bio, that your daughters, boht 'lovely and brillisnt' might have a grandfather MY age (good grief!) . Maybe they could learn from this poem of mine: (cont.) (free to kids of members!)

Your title is 'nice', but I think of it as 'simple, bland, & bnot so eye-catching as many of mine, but I STILL LIKE IT. ;)

Thanks for your Poet's Notes btw. Your bio here states: 'Associate Professor, teaching major subjects in English'. Let''s see if I can teach a teacher something! ! The losest mark/grade I ever got in high school was a D (not good) once in English.

Reyna, I'm back. I checked the notes you left under each poem and surmise/quess/'guesstimate' that you are aboiut my only child's age, a woman in her early 40s. I wonder if she ever wrote poetry not-assigned.

Ok, an old poem this is. But I've homeeard s of Ophelia Dimalanta's poems were/are old also. Now, I'll return to comment further later. bri : )