Down The Drain Comments

Way to go! Visual. Poetry. You get it.

i love it i just hope to god that its not a true story! xxxxxxxx

So I've re-read this poem and pieces of this poem about 3 times, attempting to assemble my thoughts. More than anything, the courage that it took to write this poem keeps striking me. Poetry allows people (me at least) to let everyone see their vunerable naked side. This poem lets readers see you at a personal, vunerable, almost childlike moment. As you come up gasping for air, I am gasping for air. You not only relate the story, you write it in a way that I am on the edge of my seat. I like the second half the best, it seems to have more flow. Amazing job though.