Down Memory Lane - In A Local Train Comments

Made a revisit today. Enjoyed to the core.

Nice work madam. Keen observation. Congrats

A splendid slice of verse, young missy..No surprise to me, tho'...I've come to expect it from your jacket of literary jewels! ~FjR~

What a pleasure to find your poem on the first page dear Sandra! Lovely writing, your magic pen carried me back reminding me of own childhood times, yes, for me it was the same. Always a joy to read your poems, glad to find you!

Beautiful narrative poem, insightfully penned with conviction. I really enjoyed the way the story unfolded. A lovely poem indeed. Thanks for sharing. Please read my poem MANDELA - THE IMMORTAL ICON.

Great enjoyment, great training, great observation during the local train journey in Mumbai contribute to make a great poem, par excellence. Hats off to you, Sandra.

Captivating poem. I found myself riding along with you and eavesdropping on all those conversations around me. Thank you. Well done!

I have been on a similar train ride long ago, back then I was a kid. But your poem reminds me of those days and you describe it so beautifully. Thank you, Sandra

Sounds like a great way to spend part of a day. I relish that feeling; of being surrounded by delicious talk; and being owned by nobody, can freely eavesdrop or participate in either of the discussions that appeals to me; or simply remain the mysterious stranger who only listens..(smile)

Your minute powers of observation are very much in evidence in this write. Excellent narration as well.

I love taking the public transport, in such a way, you can be inspired through out by the variation of characteristic and behavior of a large commuters on board.

powerful compact composition! The train can be a amazing metaphor! 10+

Quite true what you say....The Mumbai local, among other things, can teach one (if required) to be PATIENT..... Cheers. Subroto

one a train ride, one has many choices... you can sleep, read a good book, listen to music, use your laptop, watch the wonderful scenery or listen and observe the people around you, write a poem... indeed how can one be bored?

This poem reminds me the local train journeys in the Kolkata area in my younger days. It can indeed be very enjoyable. Very well written.

Great persons listen more observe more. This is a very very good poem........touching the realities of life..........a piece of life in train.........all that commotion, those runs and sweats........Wonderful experience......reading this poem.

dear sandra, even i too travel in local trains... from those people, i pick up lots of jokes and write it down on my diary... some i can use them for writing stories and poems...these people are so innocent...

Very warm and colorful. You travel in good company, Sandra. And I have been with you all the way. Lovely... As always, Sandra

My God! Sandra this is a treat. From the minis to such a complete story. It's like wholesome nutritious food for a reader’s mind. It's great to read an artistic poem that long, unlike those Haikus or senryus. This is quite an interesting story like the kind you find in Amol Palekar movies, simple, nice, and beautiful. Thank you.

wow what an experience great! ! ! ! ! ! what about getting to share a poem or two does that happen on your train journey too but not so here for us its so dull no entertainment lovely poem i enjoyed it a tenner for your narration and style anjali