Dormant Comments

Great. Though i got lost in the psychotic trail. This poem reveals a lot more than is obvious. A life that is insurpotable of potentials for example. But have u ever found smthing in the exact same spot that u've bn rummaging? Yes, sometimes we discover only after we experience.

Tiffany, I find this a very nice one. Your choice of the structure, that is, cutting the lines in short phrases or words gives the staccato of emotions the writer is trying to express. I simply wonder how it would have looked, it you divide it into three verses, But of course, you have your own originality and that makes you unique.

A climb out of this dark....i like how your metaphoric expressions linked to the sense tou tried to manifest......bravo

The title of this poem provides a prior information of an inactive situation the poet persona finds himself/herself or an event he relates which has to do with inactivity. The poet persona begins by acknowledging that the absence of energy or strenght ensnares her in captivity in a durance of adversity. This penitentiary, however, is not a strong or tight one because the poet persona finds ways of escape but because she is drained and fatigued she can't seize this opportunity. This is buttressed in line 8 which reads can barely move. This weakness is so intense that she can hardly hold up her eyelids. One can imagine what kind of fatigue would prevent one from holding up ones eyelid, of course it sounds absurd, but indeed it explicates the intensity of the weariness of her being. She goes further to delineate this by recognizing her limbs which should help in the escape, but unfortunately the limbs are limp. The process of reawakening it is too challenging a feat. Recognizing her incapacity to harness strenght from within, the poet persona calls out to a being unknown in apostrophe, having a little faith but this is briefly challenged with a rhetorical question of disbelief can this be Acquiesced? nevertheless, she plods on with her request to perhaps a deity to assist her with strenght and foresight to escape. However, this doesn't go down well with me because it's already been stated that there is a way out(endless escapes...) . The poet persona recognizes this place of adversity which causes dormancy as a dark hole which symbolizes evil, treachery, pain etc. And dank hole gives an image of unfavourable weather and unpleasant setting. She continues the supplications now and finally gives the reason for her prayers- restoration of her happiness. The style of the poem is apt for its subject matter and possibly themes, diction is apposite, enjambment is deployed adeptly; and the poet is a good picture-painter who lucidly gives her audience a perfect picture which is capable to instill in them feelings of pity for the poet persona. Great work Tiffany!

strength is always a good way to fight through on the line At my Disposal that could be one line though

nice soulful lines...