Sunday, August 12, 2007

Domestic Abuse (C)8-12-07 Comments

Rating: 5.0

Thrown to the floor punched, slapped, and bruised
Give me all your stuff is another way to be abused
Being verbally raped with the words that will never be forgiven
Smacked in the face so much you just want to stop livin'
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Zahir Kijani
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Ashley Stone 06 July 2009

All I have to say is Brillant! ! ! ! ! !

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Andrew Matthews 21 June 2009

Hello, I really thought this poem was a great one, very well observed and great skill with the rhyming and rythym. A great poem about an awful side of life, and gives great advice at the end. kind regards andrew m

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Wilma Horne 11 May 2009

Very powerfully written. This should make us aware of what sometimes really goes on behind closed doors. Keep writing. <3

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Hailey Agnew 29 April 2009

not too bad, i liked it. your poems really flow, they're powerful.

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Sally Plumb Plumb 25 April 2009

Hi! This is an upsetting piece. Try my piece 'Domestic'. Take care.

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Isabella Genova 24 April 2009

That was amazing ans very powerful! I like this poem a lot.

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Sandra Martyres 23 April 2009

This poem is an eye-opener and sends out a powerful message...The 911 reminder is a fitting finale to a great piece...10++ from me Corey

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SAM Mitsuki 14 April 2009

A great poem, great flow, and a tight ending. Its great.

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Tamra Craft 10 April 2009

Great poem, it has a great flow to it. and a great message too!

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Barry A. Lanier 10 April 2009

Loving this 911 advice and a fitting termination to the poem...wish I had thought of that in my poem 'Rape & Revenge'

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Annie Collins 08 April 2009

brill peom its the best ive read by a long shot well done keep up the good work love that u keep it real

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Myrtle Thomas 08 April 2009

Cory, you did excellent on this sad write, with a lot of imagery and emotion.I added one yesterday called (Our Children Are Dying)

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Shekhar Joshi 08 March 2009

you wrote it well that too on a worthy subject rhyme schemme is good too good work

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Serap Biyikli 27 February 2009

Amazing! Your poems are good.

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Reshma Ramesh 26 February 2009

sad but happening........well the advice is right...on one should stand abuse...well penned

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M A 26 February 2009

this poem has great rhythm. its very well written.

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Barry A. Lanier 21 February 2009

Enjoyed your public statement on abuse particularly the advice call 911

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Reshma Ramesh 19 October 2008

you are brave...........keep writing! !

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Ying Escalona 12 August 2007

very simple...9 1 1...a great protector of your people

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Zahir Kijani

Zahir Kijani

Buffalo, New york
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