Saturday, July 18, 2015

Doggerel Comments

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Dumb dukes distort dignified doctrines
Desecrates divinely distinct districts
Daily decimates definite dashing destinies.
Dear dimwitted, deftly-daft dudes,
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Nel Omofolarin
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Enyinwa Okechukwu Enyinwa 25 October 2015

Great poem.. I so much love the setting..

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Ayman Parray 18 August 2015

You work so diligently to achieve wonders my friend. Congratulations.

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Edward Kofi Louis 28 July 2015

Dialysis! With the mus eof life. Thanks for sharing this poem with us.

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Ken E Hall 28 July 2015

Dutiful dictation describes Doggerel's despotic days...not the way to write and who wants to know about a despot, I'm feeling a bit dotty...regards

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Bri Edwards 27 July 2015

dog·ger·el ˈdôɡərəl/ noun noun: doggerel comic verse composed in irregular rhythm. verse or words that are badly written or expressed. the last stanza deteriorates into doggerel - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - another new word for me. so NOW i see the poem in a different light and don't feel 'so bad' that i didn't completely get it. and [depending on how much of the above definition(s) apply] this explains the inconsistency i mentioned in my second of 3 comments on this poem. bri :)

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Bri Edwards 27 July 2015

Dumb dukes distort dignified doctrines Desecrates divinely distinct districts Daily decimates definite dashing destinies. ......... .................................. i would think that with dukes (plural) you should follow with desecrate and decimate not desecrates and decimates. bri :)

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Nel Omofolarin 27 July 2015

You are really taking your time to disect every word of this poem, which is something I really love....the truth is you are really a brilliant mind.the poet's note should take care of other detailed explanations of the poem..thanks for your comment.it will be corrected in my book...you might be interested in my other alliterative poem titled 'phantasmagoria'

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Valsa George 27 July 2015

With 'd' words, you have played magic! It is interesting to read it! Altogether it has the effect of rumbling thunder! Bravo, friend!

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Bri Edwards 26 July 2015

this is a new word to me: de·mot·ic diˈmätik/ adjective adjective: demotic 1. denoting or relating to the kind of language used by ordinary people; popular or colloquial - - - - - - - - - - - - favorite line: Deposing the despot down-towards deep, dark dungeon......... great alliterations WHICH i UNDERSTAND! i also have a poem on PH which is full of alliterations, but the lines do not tell a story; each is a a mini-story or scene. your poem was probably more challenging to write, and [though i don't follow all of it well, especially the part about democracy] i applaud it. just the alliterations made it worth reading, and i'm glad you were willing to use some words which i'll call non-alliterative. if i think of it later, i'll look my mine to send to you. let me now look at the second poem you have sugested to me. thanks for the poet's note. bri :) =================================

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Nel Omofolarin 27 July 2015

Demotic as used in the poem dipicts 'common peoples, average peoples'

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Nel Omofolarin 27 July 2015

Thanks for your comment

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Abubakar Abdulkadir 22 July 2015

Creativity at its peak. I was enchanted by the style of the poem - A kind of narration peppered with witty diction. - Yeah, a meaningful word play.

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Nel Omofolarin 27 July 2015

Thank for your comment

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Nel Omofolarin 27 July 2015

Thank for taking your time to pose this comment

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Pranab K Chakraborty 21 July 2015

Democracy, a delusive, demagogic despotic demonstration? Poet's note illustrates us the story behind this word-game. Diction seems to be nice if it does not bore the reader to land its catastrophic or ending line. Here, specially this writing, begins so smart with spontaneous flow of words but gradually it seems to be stretching with a motivation to depict something. And as a reader getting loose the attention of inventing a poet genius.

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Yewande Adedokun 21 July 2015

Yes all them spoilt men. good job

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Nel Omofolarin 28 July 2015

Ore mi, I appreciate your comment

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Tony Adah 20 July 2015

A super alliterative rendition! Good description of democracy turned democrazy.

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Tony Adah 20 July 2015

Super alliterative rendition, a good tale of democracy in a dementia called demo crazy! Thx Nel for sharing

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Kenneth Maswabi 20 July 2015

Poetry at its best. You are an inspiration to my crazy poetic mind.Thank you.

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Nel Omofolarin 05 August 2015

Lol- thanks

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Jayatissa K. Liyanage 19 July 2015

Wow! What a powerful ballistic missile of chosen syllables aptly placed and arranged to pierce through and blast the target in to dust. Genius! Very impressive, indeed.

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Nel Omofolarin 28 July 2015

Thanks for your comment Jayatissa

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Hazel Durham 19 July 2015

Amazing write with powerful choice of words that deliver a punch with such force!

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Nel Omofolarin 28 July 2015

Thanks Hazel

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Fabrizio Frosini 18 July 2015

you've done a great work with words, Nel, no doubt about.. And this sort of experimental poetry is interesting, but I prefer poems like 'Amazon' and 'Moody'.. that is the 2 poems of yours to be published in the Anthology ebook, with my translation into Italian... Ciao Fabrizio

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Nel Omofolarin 27 July 2015

Looking forward to seeing the poem in your coming work.thanks for giving me a chance.grateful to your comment

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A detailed, descriptive dictum dealing decisively with democracy when it becomes diabllical. Well worded my friend. Alliteration proliferation!

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Nel Omofolarin 28 July 2015

Howard thanks for your well alliterative comment

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Raymond Farrell 18 July 2015

I like how you brought dialysis into this as a way of getting the filth out of the political process in light of the distortion and abuse of power the poem describes. Well written and it carries a warning and strong message.

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Nel Omofolarin 27 July 2015

Farrel...I feel honoured to have your comment here

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