Disjointed Comments

Art imitates Life imitates our Inanimate Objects. Some terrific metaphors here. Well done. Cheers, G

that was deep meaningful poem ended beautifuly where under blanket you hide seeking some warmth created by mind..as i say rusty mind who abide..is it left, is it right, who belong to my side..or hot bread, my mind is dead.....feed the mind with hot bread..may be your poem and mine explain that needs for maintainace of the body and brain through a warm rain..enjoyed the reading..10+++++

now that's a coolllllll poem indeed...enjoyed it very much... it got it all, action, drama..sort of an amusing read sir..thanks for this one 10+++++++ regards shan

John, an enjoyable piece of work.10/10 Ian

This has good rhythm and flows well. Disjoined is a fitting title and the way my head feels today lol. Thank you for sharing of your talent with us :)

Make do seems to be the order of the day. The third and fourth verses seem to relate to two problems I have at the moment. Still I'll probably just stick me head in the sand as usual. 'Necessity is the mother abstention' Not right but fits the bill. A really enjoyable piece John. I have seen some of your work on the forum. Best Regards Steve