Dirt On The Ground Comments

You've expressed your somber thoughts quite clearly in this poem. The concluding eight lines are superb: 'Broken is my fate Even my shadow leaves ruin in its wake All I touch I violate Into pieces my core apart breaks The remains haphazardly surround Every clump mixed into the dirt on the ground Only distinguishable is my heart as it pounds And pounds....forever, as pain has no bounds ' Well done!