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Diona In Electric Effect Comments
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A famous composer's line
Just excites this heart of mine
Sending shiver down my spine.
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Bernard F. Asuncion
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7/21/2025 5:15:06 PM # 1.0.0
This is not too bad, but I find the adjective fine a bit trivial here. The word trivial is too broad to express a message that has touched you or the voice in the poem. You could use is more powerful or meaningful word. I see that fine is used for its rhyme, but it makes the poem somewhat weak.