Difference! Comments

Now that was original! ! ! I was so startled to read the word Sand! ! ! I reread the verse. Ah-ha! I eagerly read the second verse. Cloud! ! ! Awesome! ! ! ! I hoped for more verses because I so enjoyed this angle on love- -it was heart-breaking but so fresh and straight from the anguished heart! ! 10++++++++++++++++

I always find myself coming back to this verse. Each time, I am struck by a slightly different message, a different nuance. I now notice how the words can mean the louder we shout, the more we demand to be noticed, the greater the risk of disappearing...into the metaphorical clouds. A profound work, Ali.

approaching my love with countless kisses bleeding fast, screaming loud... love the ending..thank you for this very well penned poem

An imaginative presentation on nature with muse of life. Stunning expression. Thanks for sharing.

Vast as ocean, apart as grains I could remember... no songs of love, no voice of hate So... warm during day and... cool at night ... you stretched your arm initiating a relation! ! ! in the next moment... I slipped off your hand... When I was SAND! - - - - - - - - - - - Feeling of love is grace of God.The earthly love is but a particle of His infinite love. The soul cries to be united with love.- - from finite to infinity.

One touch, we become sand. We dissolve. We disappear as what we are turns into tiny fragments.That is the power of a single touch! A great poem, Ali.

Excellent poem in thought, structure and images. It's a kind of poem one would like to read to immerse oneself in pleasure of poetry.

Imaginative use of nature's images - - I also liked the structure you used in this poem

... approaching my love With countless kisses... That's something to remember.

A great poem on relationship. Conveys the complexity of love relations very well.

A sad poem written as an outburst of pent-up emotion.Very nice.

A beautiful symbolic poem, impressive being meaningful............................

my tired soul and endless journey unbearable distance but somehow we must make this journey there are times I feel the same way but I endure

Dear Ali, Thanks for your kind comments. this poem reflects the agony and pain of love. Nicely wrtten. Thanks again.

Vast stretch of sand shows enormity and rain bearing cloud indicates life! Let your love be vast and life giving! !

Sand slips and cloud breaks up and disperses. Let me be something different to approach love. Nice imagination. Thank you.

the vastness of the Nature is the paraphernalia of your art of poetry...a vast canvas!

Okay....fine...and sweet tooo.. 10++++++++++

I liked the similies sand and cloud good imaginations regards sandhya

Sand and cloud...The symbols are carefully chosen. Good. I liked it. At your age, love poems are natural for you. 'Cool in the night'. Kindly re-write as 'Cool at night'. This is what my teacher says from the corner of my mind! . Thanks for sharing.