Tuesday, July 17, 2007

Devalued Comments

Rating: 2.6

The most effective
terrorist would devalue
money until there
was no confidence
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John Kipling Lewis
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K Holoholo 05 November 2007

I don't like it, I think I know what you are trying to say but it needs to be reworded. The beginning starts out well but then it needs help.

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Kath Moore 05 November 2007

3. A lot of abstractions. The idea for the poem is fine. But it has to be treated with details, otherwise it just doesn't work.

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John Kipling Lewis

John Kipling Lewis

Manhattan, KS
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