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This piece had me standing and seeing someone crouched on the ground looking at me as you described in the first verse..a tattered old jumper slung around his neck/shoulders. You captured the scene beautifully. Very well done! ! I work with the elderly, and when they speak of their lives, I am at times so surprised at the content and what they have endured. I believe that's why the 'wonderment' in your poem was so real. Thankyou eloida. Regards...Sharon.

Beautifully written well conceived poem.Words were chosen very carefully to content the inner rhythm of the poem. Thanks.