Saturday, June 14, 2008

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They slaughtered the icon in captivity
as an act of mercy.
To know the secret of madness
why people were falling on knees?
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Joseph Daly 15 June 2008

Satish, this is excellent. The narrative is beautifully and imaginately put together. The major drawback is the inclusion of 'bipolars and schizophreniacs' in the pernulitamte stanza. It falls flat as a result of it sounding hectoring. The poem reads great without them.

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