Friday, May 6, 2016

Deserving Of Garlands Comments

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She causes me to peer through twilight air
I have patience to make out faint outlines
She lends delight to shimmering ripples
For I have watched highlights in her hair
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Denis Mair
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Susan Williams 03 June 2016

Denis! ! How do you come up with these so original so vivid phrases? - - - - - - - - - - - - For I have watched highlights in her hair - - - - - - - - - From an arrow's flight away I know her swing and sway Steps of an elephant echo her resolve- - - - - - - - - - A blackbird trills her morning freshness - - - - - - - - - Rounding a corner I see her suddenly My stomach drops like a bucket in the well Whatever strikes me I store up to tell her - - - - - - - - - - - It's this kind of writing that brings me to my knees, Denis. You are a creative giant

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Dr Tapan Kumar Pradhan 01 June 2016

BEFORE THE GARLAND WILTS.... What use waiting for July Four Or August Fifteen for that matter And why at all this Nine September Waiting for rains, rains will not come We need our Hour of Freedom. Rainbow is receding farther and farther Now even August you do not remember What more exams you need to appear When you are already a Certified 'Pro'? Come this June, my love Let us make it on Fourth At least the taking of Oath Yes, flowers can wait And so can the rains And the cutting of cakes With the cherries can wait But let us meet at least on Fourth.

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Bharati Nayak 09 May 2016

Very lovely lines about love and creativity.To quote the poet- - 'Her talk and nearness planted a lens in me I am besotted with aiming it at every thing.'

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Denis Mair 11 May 2016

Thanks for seeing the theme of creativity here. My hoped-for creativity would make garlands for the eternal beloved.

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