Saturday, January 10, 2009

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Rating: 4.3

Focused on a goal with a daring purpose
Persuasive distractions frame a logo
The mistake of notice, breeds curiosity and interest
Attention changes... the Veil comes on
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A masterful motivational mandate that is introspectively inductive.10/10

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Greenwolfe 1962 27 January 2009

This is not my style of poem and it was impossible for me to follow the message it was trying to transmit to the reader. Therefore, I cannot score it high or recommend it to other readers. Regretfully. GW62

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Joscelyn Alderdice 26 January 2009

Well done on this poem. It flows rather well :)

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Debbie Kean 18 January 2009

This expresses the frustration of regret very well, Deb

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Ivor Hogg 16 January 2009

All part of the learning process My friend in preparation for finding the right one

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Anjali Sinha 16 January 2009

It's dream time in Fool's Paradise if not focussed on goals -well done Fred--. 10 anjali

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Marshall Cline 16 January 2009

I enjoyed the theme of this poem, just because I have gone though this very thing so many times in my life. Nicely written. ~Marshall Peter Cline II

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C. P. Sharma 16 January 2009

Satanic seduction starts taking shape. CP

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Ency Bearis 16 January 2009

good write..a twist of distraction to reality re-focused..nice theme..

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Dolan Doran 15 January 2009

nice..i like it...it's interesting...sounds like someone got a little distracted and life smacked 'em in the face with reality...nice...real, honest. it's good.

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