Dedicated To....... Comments

Whomever is this guy, this boy, he is a lucky one.To describe things like love, loneliness, strong feelings, depression, sadness or whatever in a poem it requires from the poet a great hability to deal with words versus feelings versus imagination.Mainly the imagination.The poet can see things that a normal person can't.His eyes are like a camera by which he captures the smallest images, sometimes, images that no one can't realize a great meaning behind it, and he changes it into a great poem.Emma's steps, gradually, are walking toward this direction...

soft words..strong feelings...10+

Dear Emma, I appreciate your writing poems on love very boldly.You tried to maintain the ABAB format so far as rhythm is concerned. But you have not maintained the meter properly. 1) para one is perfect 2) para 2 &3, meter count is not maintained, Besides, ''deep'' word is used thrice. you can improve upon it by using thesaraus. 3) The word 'irreplaceable' is hard, if you can find a soft word or use an imagery, the poetic appeal of the poem will improve. 4) Para 4,3rd line is little longer, otherwise o.k. 5) last para last line, , 'was ' should be 'were' I'm giving below some alternate version of para2,3, &4, choice is yours. 'Whenever I am near you I feel a shiver down spine Which keeps me rooted Something I can't describe When I look into your eyes A deep and firm connection Forms a lock between us A pure love, - dedication I am but a simple poet Writing my feelings for you Translating emotions to word As poems expected to do' I know, you may not like so much of operation in your poem. But read it loud now and you'll know the difference. If you feel, you may accept it, In any case choice is yours. I 'm rating you highly for a bold attempt Rajkumar

surely a deep rooted love poem...touch deeply inside...hope one day..you will be by his side...for ever.

This is a very very amazing poem. It is very deep and beautiful like many of your poems. Keep writing because you are great at it :)

well well well writen i like it alot

Great poem - good use of words and wonderful expression of feeling and love!

like it. stating your emotions simply while keeping a good rhythm. nice work emma

I like this wright good job!

Wow... that is a really, really good poem keep it up!