Decrepitude Comments

Good work...but pessimistic.....as Mehraneh Hosseini has commented.

Hi Nice job, I love it's rhyme.Adieu life? why? where is the place of HOPE in your poem? or TELEOLOGY, ONTOLOGY, EPISTEMOLOGY? believe that such a life is aimless. Keep working

We never see how around pull us below to underground but we deny the things when we up to the sky.... creating boundary between freedom and caged, confusing your soul to stay in body or move without physical, never doubt this poem so sharply hit the note on poetry keys but in hope of light...it full of black, pain and things to torture...break the air that you breathe now, and in another dimension you should enter...where the the pain and happy in balance intensity..we will never feel good if we used to be in bleeding...like we stay in dark and blame the room for the dark, go out collapse the wall let the sunshine in tp reach your skin..Lovely right but need more spirit to fight..talented to kill fearfulness_Unwritten Soul

rhyming is very good, poem flows gently..

A very positive thoughts equipped with much poetic elements.Good job Amir.

Good flow, good write

life lives till hopes live..good write..

excellent poem..beautifully expressed...

Life and death are mysteries and one has to experience them both in order to understand the unity that is Life. A very good write Amir!