Friday, October 23, 2015

Deception - Never Learned Comments

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In her dreams she was laughing
I was crying and awake
her body was moving as if in dance
my heart was beating like boiling bubbles
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M. Asim Nehal
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Darren Jkoeryo 30 July 2016

And one of the best I have read of yours poems.10 Marvelous points

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Akhtar Jawad 24 October 2015

Even in dreams she knew the art of lying Even in my awake state I failed to learn the lessons. Truly beautiful..............

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T Rajan Evol 24 October 2015

Truth is always better even if you have to suffer because of it.Good write Asim, God Bless u.

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Anil Kumar Panda 24 October 2015

Different ideas are crafted differently. Loved it.

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Loke Kok Yee 24 October 2015

difficult to learn when in love Thanks Asim-10

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Sanjukta Nag 24 October 2015

You are the master of expressing different aspects of life. You have wisely crafted the contrast ideas in the poem. Great work. Loved the last couplet.

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Rajnish Manga 24 October 2015

The poem is a revelation of life's truths which you have done with remarkable ease. Thanks. I would like to quote a couple of lines from the poem to prove it: To say the truth is like lighten your heart to conceal the truth is carrying burden on your back

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M Asim Nehal 24 October 2015

Thanks much Rajnishji, I admire your comments,

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