Death Of A Slave Girl Comments

This poem is so dark, what a vicious thing to do to a person, but especially if it's solely based upon the color of their skin. My heart goes out to any person that has ever been preyed upon, but this picture.. this poor girl.. my heart bleeds. It is very sad that this still happens and that more and more people overlook it. Your poem will definitely open some eyes, and many more hearts to the unexcusable actions of some that have ruined and blemished the lives of others. This is a powerful write, one that is concerned of disregarded compassion and humanity. -L.C.

This is one of the most moving and excellently thought-out pieces I have had the pleasure of reading, so compassionate yet so sad You have lots to be proud of here Melvina, Top Form Love duncan X

hi Melvina, you paint a real dark picture...the exploitation, the suffering, the victim...all is very well inscribed... i read the poem several times b4...but was not able to articulate how i felt... its such a dark chapter in human history that i guess it pains us all even to think about it... this is an excellent poem... regards, Asma...

Melvina what a sad poem but it shares such greatness that you have put it to text what every slave girl went through. Fantistic write cheers Sylviex

Oh my goodness Melvina...this is really an eye opener! I hope this was just your muse! Great write, Theo

The poem can be visualised in one's mind as we go about reading it.Wonderful write. Ashish.

You have written this piece with a lot of grit and power...... one can feel the moistness of one's eyes! The way you have narrated the episode - its almost 'live'.... and it pierces the heart of the reader and makes feel the pain of the slave girl. You have written this well... undoubtedly! ................. I really wanted to write more in praise of this poem but I am feeling so much of pain that words have just drowned in the sorrow of the girl.

a very well written piece which tells of the darkness and ignorance of our pst they say we should learn from our past, but some hardly ever do, this piece definitely showed the dark humanity that some humans are capable and they are evn proud of it, , when will racism end, , along with cruelty, your words will echo out forever to remind and maybe change someone, by showing the disgusting things they are capable of, , , , blessings...Cecil

This is a very dark sad poem that calla attention to Our past.Melvina it disturbed me so much to picture it that I did not even respond to it when I read it last night.It hurt to much to read that it went on...and even more that with all we know as a so called educated 'People' it still goes on! Prejudice is just a little more hidden and not quite as accepted these days but it depends where you live as well as to how much it is accepted... Seen it, Been there, done that....and still it saddens me to think of that girl in your story being a loved one, friend...or never mind that NO human should experience Prejudice and just plain hatred based on the color of their skin (Period!) I thank you so much for sharing this TRUE tale with us my friend and I thank you 4 just being you and being thoughtful and calling attention to controverisial poems and speeches. U R the 'Bomb! '...Don't ever forget it! Love, =Shelley= TOP marks for U.10.

A dark tale of truth of our past and present Melvina...very well voiced...a ten for sure......................All the best, Diane

Melvina: The comments by David is how I feel ot this situation, you tell the story well and altho hard to digest, true in many ways, you need go no farther than the internet to get facts that we still are accepting slavery, and sadly children envolved in many parts of the world, India, Africa, Thailand, China, Brazille, Palistine, IItaly, Iran, Iraq, Pakistan, Russia, and good ole USA. I kid you not all on the internet. I have spent all my life being ignorant of the world situation, perhaps being to busy raising my family, spending 4 years in a war with Japan, all my time spent overseas on an Island in the South Pacific, but I did learn one thing you can't satisfy everyone you have to satisfy yourself, I don't condone child sexual molestation, rape, or assult to a child or senior citizen, I will give my life to assist, I believe all mankind is one and we worship one God, and our only purpose on Earth is to know and love God and bring forth an everlasting civilation, It seems every one dwells on the unpleasant thing of life, guess it sells newspapers, I want to finish up the rest of my life remembering the hapoy times even during struggle, there is time for hapoiness, and I had my share of hard times and I shall leave my poetry for whoever cares to venture.into our world. I try to include nature in my work as most people never see the forest for the trees. with this thought in mind i sign off. Radiant Acquience~ Haiku Radiant Acquience~Haiku Lets learn to accept with Radiant Acquience Things we cannot change Charles Garcia March 2006 Charles Garcia

As David Harris pointed out this could be a piece out of history, when these acts of brutality were quite common, especially during Biblical times. but like you say in your poem, 'hope for the future that all will be saved.' Where is that future we have been calling for all these years? Although it's not call slavery anymore, it still goes on today.

Melvina... What a Fantastic and very dark tale, of mans Inhumanity to our fellow man... Written so Beautifully...10

Very brutal, dark, and horrific. However, unfortunately, it rings of truth. It's well written with a good flow...just very sad. Well done, Daniel