Death In A Lunch Hour Comments

burst of off the street heart attacks, the last hope of ever thwarted reasoning and too the waitresses were cardboard

This poem is amazing in statement, rhetoric and metaphors, with a strong language and a solid poetic structure. It resembles a rare movie clip, or animated draw of a brilliant painter, and so you make from everyday things precious, invaluable pieces with deep philosophy meanings. 10/10 and onto my fav list, well done

this is one of my poems that is also on Write Out Loud here's a comment from that poetry website " Enthralling, stylish and quite spellbinding. Great writing, loved it."

Explicit imagery, a person about to boil like rice.... beautiful metaphoric Then waitress grumbled... Cat-back whiteness of fear I think. Street heart attack..last hope of ever .. wonderful write.