Death Bed Comments

Is this the end? sad, but not the end. The judgement day is the end Nicely written.

I have read this over and over. A passenger of my own existence, great line!

wow. it does sound like the end, amazing use of imagery. love your expression. you touch my heart. Death is unfortunately part of living. Great work brother,

There are things we never want to end and never want to let go..but fate has its way of getting through what has to happen.

This line summed up death for me...The thought of losing all that I know is unsettling...This is my greatest fear as a mother. I have two young boys, I know that my eldest likes his cheeses in slices, that my youngest will only sleep with his Mickey mouse. That thought that if I should leave them who will know what I know about them is indeed very unsettling. You have been very insightful throughout this poem, well written :)

is this the end? a universal question. loved reading it.

There is a strange feeling I get about Consciousness, almost that we are merely passive witnesses. This sense comes across to me in what is a very well written poem. there is much deeply felt emotion which is well expressed. My first read of your verse and well worth the visit. tom billsborough

Our ancient scriptures also say that things don't end with death. The body decays and merges with earth while the soul moves on and gets itself a new home in another body. Nice work. I like the way it begins and ends with the same line, Is it the end? It makes the poem sound very lyrical...Thanks for sharing.

The thought of losing all that I know is unsettling. Really appealing for anybody that minds scruple.

It's good to start and end with 'Is this the end? ' Some deep emotion here. M.Walker.

this one is definitly a great one, i think a good poem is always appealing the first time we read it, and then can't help reading it more times. i will collect this one into my notebook. Thanks for sharing. Anne

I really like this poem Jeremy, particularly the lines - 'Memories bleed from my mind. Tears follow the buried feelings unearthed by the wound.' There is something deeply poignant at work here, the realisation of the transitory nature of the existence of humans, the thoughts that proceed from such a 'feeling' are very subtly portrayed here.. There is gentle way of expressing tough ideas/realisation etc. A finely crafted poem.. Thank you.

This is amazing! I was easily pulled in the first couple of line. Great artistry. Great imagination! KW

My never-ending story shines bright. Yet, a story has an end and despite my hope for it to never end... Very strong words my friend keep up the good work :)

A never-ending story of life unfortunately always has an end when we breathe our last. With poets though we live on in everything we write as others read them through the years. Some will be cherished and treasured much more than we ourselves will ever be. Great poem. Thank you for sharing. RoseAnn

Beautiful poem, love the humour and the lucidity of the words, flowing seamlessly... :)

Good piece of work (If you have a spare few seconds try A Humorous Death.Regards Sally

the first two stanzas were impeccable i was consumed by it..... what a lovely poem...thanx for sharing do check my own as it has similar undertones... Death Is Calling At My Door

it really does it for me and i hope you'd put some of your work on record and have us listen to the richness of this silence. i love it

Naw... it's not the end. You're still young. It's when you get to be my age that you should wonder about things like that. Well written poem.