Dear Father Comments

The poem expresses your deep attachment with your father. You have successfully painted the whole situation. Rich in imagery and style. Nice write.

Nice sentiment but rhyming alone doesn't make a poem. Some personal concrete images would have made you poem about your father far stronger in many ways. So real personal memories like what he like to eat, how he dressed, how he said goodnight to you as a child. How he smiled anything of this sort would have made your father far more real than the abstracts that you presented in the poem. Think about what the reader doesn't know and realize that the reader wants that person stuff that makes things real. Stuff that draws a real picture in their head. A poet needs to draw the reader in and maintain them. This what makes the difference between a great poem and a simple rhyme. You should read Dylan Thomas' poem After the Funeral (In memory of Ann Jones) which deals with the death of someone he cared for very much. You will notice he uses the intimate images and describes the funeral in detailed words that make us feel the the burial and the the reception room after the funeral. We end up with a real picture of poor Ann Jones. Even the stuffed fox in her room and how death is even in the unwatered fern in her house. They are real images and symbols that leave the reader with real feelings about Ann Jones. We know her somewhat after reading the poem. A poet friend// RH Peat

Feeling Poetry on Papa …down the memory lane vivid ] I trust like all departed parents where may be they're shower love to kids unceasingly … thanks for sharing Hon’ble Poet Merna Regards Ms. Nivedita UK 10/10

this was so sad almost made me cry great job : ')

the longing for a father is written just the way it should be here.... nice poem... do you know Mr. Omar Ibrahim?

Fine poem................................

Shivering and Sad. a sincere poem. hope your father get to Heaven GOD bless you/

this a very very good poem and ur deep feelings are really great god bless you, , , , with love

After you have gone. unfortunately, I understood you now, I really do. I miss your shouting I miss your smiling I need you....but i wish I would see you in heaven I hope you are in heaven...................it is really a strong wish from daughter and tribute to a father who did so much for the family... lovley poem and i apriciaqte it so much....10 read mine papa do u know.......papa u too...... along with o, mother

N that has lead me to depression n suicide n cutting

Awwww sweetheart..you poem is so loving I'm crying.. I can understand how u feel in a way as my mum n dad split wen I was 8 My mum don't let me see him n he think I hate him..I don't I love my dad so much.it feels like his gone n not coming back to me..I live 45 min away n he don't call drive her or even. Right to me..if I could I would tell me dad how I feel but no my mum in the way.. Grreat work..hug n luv caitlin 10++++

its a heart moving poem....i am sure this poem brings tears to everyone who reads it.....GOD is always with u....

your poem has abig effect on me, it move my feeling.the best thing in your all poem that you write them with your feeling not with your mind and is the thing that many poems forget it.your poem talking about father who is important one in our life but regret we don't feel with that until he go far from us.

In our youthful days we seem to act that we knew all things. That we were grow ups and be able to act and do what ever we wanted to... sometimes having it in our mind to have our liberty, we miss understood our parents and never listen to their kind advice. The pity side here is... we will never know what is the true essence of their shouts and anger when we are not yet in their shoes...sometimes late to discover and not be able to settle the conflicts we have to our parents... To no further ado...this is a heartfelt composition written so beautiful...10

thanks my dear brother Jatin.thanks a lot for you Howard and Rakesh.You are all great friends! ! !

really dear our parents are nthing but the real god near us and yeah we didnt recognize them in the right way......every father tried a lot for their children.......yuo cant believe dear i am in office now and now i am crying when reading this poem.........the poem is full of truthness and emotions that i cant tolerate and control my self........ hey dear dont feel alone as i am with you for ever.........actually i wish if i am near with you and can keep your head on my shoulder.......... dont be depress and you have to become as sweet as your father wish for you.......he is god and he will be always remain with you....dont worry dear.... pls forgive if i wrote anything wrong

So sad, so sweet. Keep writing.

HAI FRIENG I UNDARSTAND WHAT YOU WANT TO SAY YOU WERE LOVE YOUR FATHER VERY VERY MUCH. BUT IT IS LIFE