Deaf Noise Comments

Great work! Also congrats on being chosen as 'poem of the day'!

First verse excellent, easy to understand. Second verse, not so much. Terry and Joseph had good comments below. Congrats on poem of the day!

Unnoticed as it grows. Nice work.

'With decibels of phlegm, those piercing noise like darts.' is very nice. Liked it.

I agree with Joseph S. Josephides, the first stanza is brilliant, the second could have been polished so easily, therefore why not? Silence comes, and it goes, Like trees everyone knows; Unnoticed as time grows, Away from earthly woes. Hiding from humans' hearts, Carefully watching lives; Decibels of phlegm ties, Soul piercing noise like darts. So many possibilities not taken, but still delightful appreciated, enjoyed, already written possibility stanzas in the mind

Deaf Noise Dear Edgar, I gave a 9 to your poem. The starting is brilliant, the contrast (silence-woes) and the similarity (silence-tree) are excellent. But I wanted some lines more to enjoy better the scenery (and then give you a 10) . Thanks for sharing.

You have a way with words and really do well in being descriptive with few. Have you ever tried Haiku form? I really like them myself, with a syllable count of 5-7-5. I think you would be really good at them, . You can say so much in few words.

a very beautiful write...thanks

Nice haiku.I write them, too.I gave you a ten