Friday, May 29, 2009

Dead Even When Alive Comments

Rating: 5.0

all we have are flowers
and water and earth and fire
when we die;
and all our certainties
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Raj Arumugam
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Raj Arumugam 29 May 2009

Dear Jasbir Thank you for your appreciation of the poem. The word 'when' has been deliberately left out (1) in order to maintain the rhythm (2) for poetic effect. Ellipsis in language allows for such omissions and yet for its presence to be assumed.

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Jasbir Chatterjee 29 May 2009

Good poem, last line perhaps needs a correction, which the title clarifies: dead even WHEN alive. 'When' before the word 'alive' is missing in the last line. Was this deliberate or unintentional?

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Ashraful Musaddeq 29 May 2009

Thoughts provoking nice poem with nice idea.10+++

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Roshni D'Souza 29 May 2009

Brilliant insight and wisdom about the unfortunate human psyche! Will add to my favs. Thanks, roshni.

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very truely said..the conditioning has stulen the present from us..the last line is apt

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