Monday, March 16, 2015

Dazzled Character Pt. Three: Mimes Of Different Tunes Comments

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Serendipity sails me across the moon of my heart.
When dying seemed like happiness,
Trouble laid waiting like a temptress snake I had to get out of,
shed the skin of who I was becoming:
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Daniel Brick 20 March 2015

Oh, the energy in Part Three is truly dazzling. It's the state of being Pablo Neruda called FULLY EMPOWERED, and it shows in the abundance of images clustering around the central theme (and it is central!) , namely, I CAN BE ANYONE I WANT TO BE. And you repeatedly restate this theme of self-realization, or recovered identity, or individualization - there are many abstract phrases that NAME this achievement, any of them will do. The important thing in this Part Three is you don't use abstractions, you produce a flood of images, forty-six lines of imagery, a plethora of concrete pictures of the Triumph of Self. It's appropriate the first word of this section is SERENDIPITY!

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