Sunday, July 5, 2009

Day Off Comments

Rating: 5.0

How fruitless I have toiled these sullen hours.
The only art I know is servitude-
To Labor, and in exchange of my time
Procure what we possess: this morning bread,
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Obinna Eruchie 12 August 2009

This is beautifully written, well done, Y P.

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This poem is really good keep writing poems

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Fay Slimm 11 July 2009

This verse grabs the reader's attention from line one - - the expressive phrases are indeed well thought out - - keep writing do.....10 from Fay

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Heather Hill 08 July 2009

I like this one a lot please keep writing u are very good

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Preety good for a starter ur awesome keep riting

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Sulaiman Mohd Yusof 06 July 2009

A DAYOFF which was depicted in a stylish writing, akin to a 'day of a lifetime'. Salamat po'.

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Carol Gall 06 July 2009

great start i like this a laboror very good

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Catrina Heart 05 July 2009

A pretty nice poem for a start fine poetic pictorial illuminated....CT

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Lady Grace 05 July 2009

this is so nice..if this will be fixed well, this is a perfect poem..grace

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