Dawn's Aural Litany Comments

littany should be litany, but who's counttting? ! hee-hee ha ha prise open a lash disobedient, flagrantly popping one pupil, unfocussed gape.........i think pries, as in does pry............ and........unfocused. BUT i am very pleased you write in English, since otherwise i would not get to read some of your poems! ! ! - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - and when i Googled 'define noisely' i found that MY spelling is not perfect. of course i knew THAT already! (see below) Showing results for define noisily Search instead for define noisely - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - madly arbitrating chores domestically ............sounds like this household! :) lashes as they rolled down, hauled rudely................this line baffles me. Perhaps adding “up” after “hauled” would help? …..for me it would! ! ! “holds a feebly trilling aural litany” …………… HERE YOU did USE JUST ONE “t”. ……… :) This shall go “as is”*** into my/our November “a showcase for PH poets”, Section B. ***[except that I shall correct the misspelling in the title to match the spelling near the end of the poem] thanks. bri :)

This wonderful sharing holds a feebly trilling aural litany that has very amazingly entered in mind of expression. Wonderful poem on dawn shared in marvelous way.10