Dawn Comments

I'm biased I love good rhymes and this one has that with a lovely message. Great flow :)

There is a time when we can relax and feel the soothing breeze of optimism. You catch this very well. Tom Billsborough

So optimistic! ! ! It's a joy reading the beautiful lines...

This was interesting, I especially like the closing stanza. -John

The place where hunger is no more. The place where freedom is at the core. The place where the invention of peace was never needed. The place where interracial relationships are the norm. very nice dear Jeremy.. may your hopes be fulfilled. this is naturally my prayer too everyday before the holy altar. i like to read the poets who are in unison with the Almighty God.

I imagined heaven :) I liked it

A very nice poem but beware of fashionable politically correct statements infiltrating your poems as this negates the dream-like, non-intellectualizing state of mind you are trying to portray here.

When the dawn awaken the morning...there's still seed of love to grow..

Hello Jeremy. I do like your though filled poem, nice work. Loyd

A hopeful DAWN...I liked the last line The place where four becomes eight feet. It's meaningful.