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Astonished to read those magnificent lines. Fantastic job. :)

you have penned everything leaving nothing for me to pen here! ! amazing! !

I really liked this poem, very emotional and powerful. I really enjoyed the pace of the poem and your poetic expressions building one on the other to communicate what is happening. Well Done.

Another excellent poem Theo this time about the death of someone in emotional pain. Your use of words to describe the persons anguish are superb. For a young writer you have a talent there, so keep on writing!

Wow, this poem is amazing! ! I can feel the emotion in this poem, the carefully written words depicting the thoughts and feelings of someone condemned to death. I find myself shedding tears from this poem. It is sad but beautiful. Tiana xx

well written story poem about someone, who lost the sense of life-touching....

very nice.it's a lovely poem.i like it.keep it up

Another lovely write

Wow you have got some talent Theo. I really like the flow and feel of this one. Another great poem! ! !

A beautifully penned poem about a lonely soul awaiting death and finally succumbing to it. There is immense talent to be blossomed in the ensuing years! Thank you for introducing ur poems to me.

I'm guessing you want me to spell check this one for you, too? Well I found 2 mistakes. One of them is in the first part, line 3 channelled is wrong, it is spelt like this: channeled. And the other is the second part, line 3 as well, enthral is actually spelt like this: enthrall. This one had tough words, I ended up using my spell checker to help me. This one is nice, keep writing (:

I love poems that make me feel something in my soul good or bad it's all good. This one placed me right there in the depths of dispare. Brilliant timeless piece

I legit am in love with your work. It just is amazing the flow of the poem which you have made a very short story and just how you just just blend it is truly the work of a true poet. well done.

i hear the anguish, feel the pain of the lost soul.Well written theo

we die many deaths on the path to life.... you are not alone!

This is very interesting to read! :) I mean it's everything I enjoy in a poem.

Whao! Dis is jst amazing...lv it: -)

Perfectly agree with each word of Unwritten Soul, lovely poem: beautiful elegant dark and well expressed, thank you for share.

Beautiful, elegant dark, and expressive soul, I feel so near in each line mean you did this poem very nicely, as i enjoyed read it, well done Theo, i am not a perfect person to judge but i think it's a very nice poem! ! ! _Unwritten Soul

The message behind this poem is very deep. Well written poem once again. Lots of love