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Taut skin of death
Pallor of onions
Mouth open
catching air
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I enjoyed this dark, care not of pomp and ceremony write. A laugh out loud moment over your last stanza which also gives a graphic, gruesome, lingering image.
Thank you Simone. I also like the ending but am still trying to figure out how to rework the first stanza. I always find the hardest thing is starting the poem. By the end it's found its rhythm but then the opening is out of touch with the rest of it! I loved your piece 'Anorexia' - very powerful.
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7/27/2025 8:17:41 PM # 1.0.0
A good start with a nice poem, Rebecca P. You may like to read my poem, Love And Iust. Thank you.