There is a place, a river run,
dark flowers by the path.
And many lovers pass this way,
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I suggest unifying the transition from one line to the next: all comas; all no punctuation; or [even] periods. Control the tempo of the reader as best you can. Don't trust them/us to get it. I love the language & images.
Beautiful, 'it will guide me unto peace and shelter me from pain'