Dark Eden Comments

i couldn't agree more with the their comments sir...it's amazing..perhaps words are not even enough to describe your poem. And i know your putting your heart in it.. I have a new poem too.Entitled 'picture' i hope you can read it but its not necessary to give a comment. Thank you sir. Beautiful poem.

Wow Dark Eden is very well written. As soon as I started reading it I felt a chill go down my spine. Nice descriptions.

resonant images...skittering across the seas of my eyes

This is a brilliant word picture, Deb

I feel sad when reading this poem.. But well written Krista

hi there! the poem is great only that it's full of sadness, loneliness and this could be only true in a dream. Anyway it sounds well and great.

This piece, as well as the others after it (I'm sure) is evocative of your Pointillist poem: it paints, not tells. The rhythm is just right allowing for a smooth flow of images. There is a grammatical situation in 'precision gauge measure' I think you have to choose which verb should have the 's'. If 'gauge' is a noun (defined by 'precision' then it's 'measures'. Would not 'all' be better then 'in esteem' since it also rhymes with 'small'? The last line of the 3rd stanza would look and sound better if you started it with 'To an audience...' Overall, another gem, Ed. The poet is a dreamer who wields magic with a two-letter wand 'if'.

dude what a poem! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! ! excellent. It's so hard to find someone who really gets it on here. You do. The imagery, the flow, the style- all perfect 10/10

I fail to appreciate the poetic logic. Dark nd cold under the sea yet you see well even if noonlight enters but not too brightly.. Bonfires under water? And yet the poem isn't surreal.

Brilliant imagery in this write Eddie, I enjoyed reading it, 10 Lynda xx

Beautiful poem. Not many people sit and look at the beauty of the world.

This is such a magnificent piece! Thanks for sharing!

A lovely piece of work. It carried the reader along with it till the very end. Quite moving and masterful. R

These are nice descriptions, but the beauty of them is muted by the absence of rhythm and rhyme. This is one piece of writing that needs it badly because the fact that it is not there is very noticeable to me. I am also sure that the readers will notice it as well. GW62

When I was a boy I use to play by the sea shore. Know just what you mean in the poem.

Images of the sea are creatively executed and the floodlights at the end brought it all to life for me. Karin Anderson

Images of the sea are creatively executed and the floodlights at the end brought it all to life for me. Karin Anderson

wonderful imagery write..an eden down under maybe in lost paradise of pacific rim..

Takig the reader into new underwater experience, this poem is both light and expressive - - thank you Eddie for introducing us to your Edenic submerged paradise.......10 from Fay.

it sounds like a dream... :)