Wednesday, October 5, 2016

Dark Blue Hours Comments

Rating: 5.0

There's a river I mold with my hands. It's made of a second or two, it's made of dark blue hours, a thought I think I might not have had if I think hard enough, honestly if it was ever in my head I think it could have been a dream of you gone missing.

I chase down things I want to say to you but they can't make sound, they chatter and don't crystallize, they flee like wild things, they'll never come out right, I'll pull back and forth on this syllable instead and take it apart and put it together and take it apart and put it together and take it apart and
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Maya Hanson
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R Soos 20 November 2016

Excellent! The first stanza pulled me in, the second stanza wowed me. Then it slows down, and I catch my breath. The final line exlodes and I feel compelled to re-read the whole poem!

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Edward Kofi Louis 05 October 2016

Silently she cries! ! Thanks for sharing this poem with us.

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Maya Hanson

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Fenton, MO
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