Wednesday, October 14, 2009

Dance A Multi-Coloured Dance Of Rainbow Comments

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Words can fail like magnets not sticking to the fridge
and we all complain when the rent is due again.
Pay your bills and meet the obligations of
the world, never mind attending to the
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Chris G. Vaillancourt
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Kay Staley 16 October 2014

P.S. I would change the name to get more readers interested.

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Kay Staley 16 October 2014

Interesting poem. I liked the viewpoint. It is challenging to think about everything in new ways and not call a spade a spade, less we get distracted by life the way it is and forget that we have the power to make life the way we want it to be. It had a little bit of a stream of consciousness feel and the abstractness was manifest. I only wish it rhymed and had more horrific language.

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