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Pictorial, and dartingly depictive, is this commendable piece of work...Your employment of tight, crisp structure, makes for a eye-pleasing read. Nice Work. FjR

Pictorial, and dartingly depictive, is this commendable piece of work...Your employment of tight, crisp structure, makes for a eye-pleasing read. Nice Work. FjR

Pictorial, and dartingly depictive, is this commendable piece of work...Tight, crisp construction, affords the reader a pleasureable, eye-ease read.

Welcome to PH Sarah... Tis soulful this poem.. heart ripping at times but then (LOL!) .. I saw spaghetti... and I thought 'Western'.. and wondered.. what the next episode might be... aroha Deana xx

This is very picturesque and come's across emotionally neutral, as if the author is unsure of her feelings about a love's return. Perhaps waiting to see how her feelings pan out when he come's back. Written well.