Cynthia Comments

" The sun is givin you a day you'll again fly" i assume " givin" above means " giving" / " givin' " . i like the poem enough. :) i like the variable rhyme 'scheme'. bri :)

Carmina, if you're going to write rhyming, formal poems like this, you need to study them. Poetic Meter and Poetic Form by Paul Fussell is a good book to look at. Also, maybe read Elizabeth Bishop and some other good formal poets. If you have time, check out my new website: jeffersoncarterverse.com Tell me how you like it. Yrs, JC