Tuesday, May 5, 2009

Cruel World Comments

Rating: 2.5

Good bye cruel world, I’m leaving you soon
Floating from consciousness, to darkness and back
Is it the start of something else? My body just a cocoon
But the pain at the moment brings a mood that is black
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jason mcgookin
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Pessimistic mind feelings but poem is good.

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Sharon-Ann Dawson 11 June 2009

I like your use of rhetorical questions, theyre questions we ourselves cant answer!

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Jason, Jason... I don't know if darkness is the answer. It's what I run away from every day. And I do hope you find lightness, even if it's a wee glimpse!

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