Thursday, June 13, 2013

Crippled Love Comments

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A love life that's crippled, lame
No longer do I wish to play this game
Way too old for his mess
Not jumping through hoops to pass his test
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MONCIANA EDMONDSON
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Saadat Tahir 13 June 2013

very touching and heart felt lines.... a degree of despondence and helplessness flows as a strong current.... whisking the reader off his feat the emotive aspect is so common place, yet tackled well i particularly liked the usage of after glow... gives it such a warm and meaningful presence...also goes well with the usage of cosmic. nice job

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Gajanan Mishra 13 June 2013

let us enjoy the bliss, good one, thanks. i invite you to read my poems and comment.

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MONCIANA EDMONDSON

MONCIANA EDMONDSON

Jamaica, West Indies
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