hello my name is isabella velazco please comment on this please
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as i grew older i became a singer.
i would always wanted to grow older.
this will be a good time to be a linker.
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Isabella, this isn't a poem. It's nothing worth commenting either. Of course your big brother is older. It's nice that you're rhyming the words, but in poetry, rhyming isn't everything. Good luck with writing poems, Cassandra J.
Isabella, I'm going to be honest. This would not be considered a poem at all. It does not make sense whatsoever. And I have to point out, Cassandra and Jacquelyn are not bullying you at all. They are giving you their honest opinion. That is what this site is about it. Study how poetry is supposed to be formed and learn how to make your poems make sense. If your poems does not make any sense then no one will like them. All the best, Alisha A.