Monday, July 7, 2008

Crayola Comments

Rating: 5.0

I'm broken on your shoulder
Nothing matters
I lay upon it to only find myself
Where my misdeeds and storms don't follow
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Rafael Cazares
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Lawrence S. Pertillar 18 July 2008

Such a descriptive, imaginative 'piece'. The title is great. 'Crayola'. Nice. 'I'm broken on your shoulder...' is a wonderful opener.

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Emancipation Planz 07 July 2008

Welcome to PH... I loved your closure... 'Shakespeares colored upon the empty'... I could sit on the crate and drink a dozen more contemplating this...

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wow very romantic... a nice way of expressing your emotions... great job.. best regards, joan d.h.

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Rafael Cazares

Rafael Cazares

Fresno, CA
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