Sunday, December 12, 2004

Cowboys Day Comments

Rating: 3.9

As he steps down
His spurs kick up the sand
He has been riding for five days
He has done the best he can
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Bill Simmons
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Samantha Garrett 12 December 2004

Very good I really liked how you introduced that hes a cowboy at the end however it may be a little bit more effective if you placed the first line as the title. It would leave a bit of mystery for the reader and then it ties it all together at the end when you say 'he is a cowboy after all'. I am just suggesting things, I really do think its good though.

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