Thursday, December 24, 2015

Conscientious Vendor Comments

Rating: 5.0

In dawn's first light unto dusk's twilight
Just one phrase and one rhythm, he repeats
"Today's draw... its in bundles and bundles ...!
Take away your fortune.... and it's yours...."
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Jayatissa K. Liyanage
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Edward Kofi Louis 14 January 2016

Who helps ja to her Information. Nice work.

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Edmund Strolis 27 December 2015

It is his life indeed/ The hard earned money at least goes to a person whose eyes one can see. In America so many people can't wait to have another go at giving their money away in the casinos owned by millionaires and they are expert at dangling the prize just so that now and then you may touch it enough to keep you trying again and again, your poem is so real that I could hear the shouts and feel the anxious people bumping elbows....splendid.

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Jayatissa K. Liyanage 27 December 2015

Thank you Edmond for your view and comment.

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Valsa George 26 December 2015

A very interesting situation put in a semi humorous style! The lottery vendor doles out luck! He makes you feel like a millionaire and for a moment, all your dreams seem to flower and fruition! Though our rational mind forbids from falling into his trap, our whimsical mind persuades us to try our luck. One may be a loser as before. But still let us not always discourage him..... After all it is his life! A 10

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Jayatissa K. Liyanage 26 December 2015

You see it perfectly, Valsa. Thank you for your encouraging words.

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Jayatissa K. Liyanage

Jayatissa K. Liyanage

Walasmulla, Sri Lanka
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