Confusion Concludes Comments

more fun to write as an exercise in free-thinking not to be taken as seriously as didactic messages meant to teach or express rofound feeling. Who really cares if conceit does not follow the i before e rule in your piece and comes out conciet. I knew what you meant. This is a tongue in cheek piece meant for the fun I took it for.

The rhymes are a bit forced, but I think the concept of the poem is strong in intent except the closure seems to fumble a bit. I think writing in the second person would help the poem a lot and speak to more readers. It might also give you some distance within the presentation to bring about a more cohesive epiphany within the poem. a poet friend RH Peat