Concrete Air Comments

Nice format and lends itself well to the reading of this poem. You do well to think up new combinations of words (concrete wings, concrete airs) instead of relying on already used metaphors.

Another great write you are very talented

great write... 'concrete wings never leave the ground'... very true... and you get that when you never ask for it...but there's nothing to worry about - at least you can see the twisted truth and laugh at it...