Complications Comments

Thanks so much! ! ! In reference to your puzzlement...the person was always around in the same area as me and hanging with my friends...but we barely spoke to each other as if we were strangers... so we were apart....yet always around each other...and that's what made it so hard. I'm glad that you liked it though. Really appreciate it :)

i really LIKED this poem, though, in general, for me to see another love' poem is only TOO soon. catch my drift.? but it was more of a 'falling to pieces' poem than a 'falling in love' poem, so it was ok! thanks for the punctuation and proper spelling of contractions; i can't always count on getting those in a poem, and i miss them. the only thing that, at least at first, puzzled me a bit were the words: 'Cause you're always around... other lines indicated that the person was around only now and then. maybe you; meant always around town but not always around YOU? - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - my favorite lines are: My heart pleads for you to come back... But no....you just stay there and watch.... As I slowly, steadily, fall to pieces... i think it is great that you did not force a rhyme here; it could have damaged the wording of the poem. and i like how you continue the second line into the third. nice! not using a rhyme helps draw attention to these 'most important lines' of the 'story'. AND the slowly, steadily alliteration was a nice touch. - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - - thanks for sharing. even though it is sort of a love poem, i'll send it to MyPoemList. bri :) [nice first name, by the way! ]