Thursday, November 6, 2014

Commitment Comments

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We all commit ourselves to something
whether it be a person or work.
They become the most important thing
that will enter our lives.
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David Harris
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Hans Vr 07 November 2014

Good poem. I like the ideas expressed and the style is very good. Not a criticism but a sincere small suggestion, David: if we can leave out something and thing out of the first three lines, I think the poetic value would increase a bit (e.g. We all make to ourselves a commitment whether it be a person or work. They become of utmost importance Not sure, in the end the poet himself knows best.

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