Tuesday, January 27, 2009

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See my hands trembling, put yours in them.
Feel my body shaking, wrap me in your arms.
Watch me walk away, as I slowly turn my head back.
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Amber Swiney
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Greenwolfe 1962 30 January 2009

This change in the middle of this was quite surprising. Particularly in view of the title of the poem. Instead of 'come ', it is actually ' go.' I'm sure there must be a good reason for this but I can't think of one. There are much better ways to do this in poetry. Curious. GW62

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